My thesis statement did clearly state that there two reasons to why we should climate change as one problem for both nature and people. Perhaps I can make it much clearer so that the reader will have no trouble identifying it. I do also agree that I can state the two reasons explicitly but I think that depends on a matter of choice and style of the writer. I personally see no harm in giving a clearer explanation and elaboration in the later part of my essay.
As for his comment on my first idea, I have no idea which two sentences which he is referring to that I should combine. Aside from that, I agree that I will have to give a more in depth elaboration on the 'basic materials' that I refer to in my essay. Doing so will help to substantiate my first point strongly.
In conclusion I do agree with him that I should have given more quotations and evidences from the article that my essay is based on. It is because they will boost my content in the essay and also to make my arguments more convincing.
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